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Re: Character Online Workshop Lesson 2

Carolan Sweet <sweetwriter@...>
 

Back again with my hero. I have filled in what I visualize so far.

 

•           He’s the lead

•           He’s the hero

•           He’s the Heroine’s best friend or wants to be at the start

•           His  Antagonist is a gang of girls who pick on him and also one teacher who doesn’t understand him.

•           His support is his mother but she can be smothering

•           His confidant is an elderly neighbor lady whose dog he walks.

 

He’s a little thin for a boy his age, but not by much. He walks with his head down, shoulders hunched so as not to bump into anyone or thing. He has short blond hair. Most of the time he wears a baseball cap. His features are ordinary, a bit narrow and foxlike, but he would not stand out in a crowd of teens. Because of his OCD he doesn’t like to touch anything so he usually has his hands tucked against his body. He wears typical teen clothes – jeans, long-sleeve tees, sweatshirts, all washed everyday and slip on sneakers (so he doesn’t have to touch them. He has a black bookbag. Inside it, he keeps everything in individual plastic bags. Basically, he blends in well except for his reluctance to touch anything because of a fear of germs. Some of the girls know he doesn’t like to be touched and go out of their way to touch him because he gets all shaky and wild-eyed.

 

Carolan

 

 

 

Lesson One Response - Francesca

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Francesca, Thanks for letting us know you are working on a paranormal romance. It gives us a bit more information when working up a character. I love the name Tula for this novel. Can only imagine what she’s going to be up to. Hoping to learn a bit more about her in Lesson Two.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Lesson One Homework Response-Kathy

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Kathy,

It’s good to see that not only do you have a basic description of your character, Jake Weston, but you already know he’s a Navy SEAL, and have pictured him as Viggo Mortensen. We’ll talk more about picturing your characters as a celebrity, or other well-known character, as the class continues. It’s always a great place to start.  I look forward to learning more about him in Lesson Two.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Lesson 2: Visualizing the Character

Francesca Fleming <francescafleming@...>
 

Hi,

Maybe I went overboard .....


Villainess: Tula Whitacre-Barnes

 

Background:  She is a wealthy Boston socialite with a Mayflower pedigree, well-educated college MBA graduate, an only child, and unmarried. She is used to having people do things for her.  Her family belongs various social clubs and her father is on the board at The Millionaires Yacht Club. Her father began teaching her business strategy as maneuvering/manipulating people starting in her third grade. She sat beside him during talks, threats and negotiations as he stopped expulsion from school her for stabbing another girl in the arm with a pencil. 

 

At 25-something, Tula currently has connections to the right people and to the ‘wrong’ people as it suits her.  Her appearance is always part of a strategy to get what she wants in business and in life. She will dress to suit her goals and often it is from the best clothiers around with bespoke accents such as purses and jewelry. All her clothes are in pastels, whites or stark business grey and are taken to a tailor to be fitted properly. She chooses to wear feminine cut suits with skirts at work or dresses at play in order to utilize her sex to get what she wants.  She has a few off-the-rack clothes she wears when she wants her friends to feel sorry for her. Jeans are for vacation, if appropriate for the venue. 

 

Body build and structure: Tula is a model-tall at a little over 6 ft and 135 lbs, fine-boned, with pale skin without a blemish with straight, thick blonde hair and round blue eyes with long eyelashes and thin eyebrows. Her narrow nose complements her oblong face and narrow chin. Her lips are pouty and warm and when she smiles it is beguiling.  She has straight, white teeth and a well-rounded bosom that money did buy.  She is not overly athletic and prefers to watch rather than participate in active sports like softball, tennis and soccer. She does Pilates and hot yoga at The Club. 

 

And everything else:  Tula wears her hair contained either in a French twist or tight bun when she is seriously working be it trolling for clients or devising new ad campaigns. Otherwise her blonde hair is styled era-2020 with an inch of her ends dusted with blonde glitter, parted to the side with the length a bit asymmetrically cut to her collarbones. Nothing is out of place. Sometimes she wears gold etched, silver colored chopsticks in her twists or bun as the work situation demands. A minimum of two carat diamond ear studs are worn. Hats must be the height of trendy and are only for outdoor events because she easily sunburns. She wears oversized rounded couture sunglasses whenever she is outdoors and she always wears her signature charm bracelet.

Thanks and Happy Typing!

Francesca Fleming

 

Lesson 1 and 2 - Carolan

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Carolan,

 

Thank you for your introduction. I wouldn’t worry about whether or not your YA topic will be ‘a popular book’, you simply have to write the book YOU want to write. The rest will take care of itself. Your focus on OCD and cerebral palsy already tells us something about your characters, and that’s a huge start.

 

Your general description in Lesson One already gives us an indication of the type of person this character is, thanks to his nickname Peaky J

 

Lesson Two--WOW! You’ve given this a lot of thought. There is so much here for you to work with already. It’s obvious you do know your subject matter, and I’m sure it will come across in your writing. Again, don’t worry about whether or not this novel will be a popular book—I’m betting on it resonating with YA from the get-go.

 

Keep up the good work.

 

Carol

 

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Lesson 1 and 2 reply - Jamie

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Jamie,

 

Good for your New Years’ resolution, and pulling out some of your fiction to work on. Hopefully we can get your characters motivated to get their story published.

 

Lesson One—I already love the concept of using the father/son’s in a concurrent romance. I can almost feel the tension between them already.  Seeing as you’ve selected the Abigail, the elder heroine, I’m assuming she’ll already have a lot of baggage to bring along with her, especially as this is an historical romance.

 

Yep, after reading your Lesson Two, she sure does!

 

Lesson Two—WOW! You’ve got Abigail nailed down. A lot of interesting descriptions to work with as she tells her story. Specific descriptions that let us know this is an historical without telling us. We can build on many of these as the class progresses, but you are off to a super start.

 

Great work,

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Re: Lesson 2: Visualizing the Character

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

WOW! I had a feeling there was a lot going on with the young Miss Tula Whitacre-Barnes, and I wasn’t disappointed J  We’re beginning to see who this character really is already. You have a lot to work with here, and it’s going to be very interesting to see who she goes up against in her story, and how it all pans out.

 

It will be surprising to see what else we can uncover where Tula is concerned as the class continues, but I’m sure you’re up to the task. A job well done!

 

And, there is no such thing as going overboard when you’re describing your characters—you might not use it all in their story, but it gives you a better insight into their character when you are writing them into your novel.

 

Keep up the good work.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Lesson 2 Homework-Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

 
In this lesson we’re going to identify a few more character visual traits that will define and add more depth to your character’s outward appearance. But before we do that, we need to define your character’s type, if you haven’t already—who they are in your story. Here are some categories to consider:
 
Who are they in your story?:
•           The lead character
•           Hero- Jake Weston

•           Heroine - Amanda Locke

•           Antagonist—evil villain -not named- he dies in the end 

•           Friend/someone who supports your lead character
Here I have 2 friends. The husband of Amanda's best friend, Frank Reynolds, was Jake's former lieutenant in the SEAL team with Jake.
Dana Reynolds, Frank's wife, is best friend's with Amanda. Both of these people are a part of Amanda and Jake's life. 

•           Other major character * I did this above
 
Going beyond the basics—what do your characters really ‘look’ like?
 
It’s time to really look at your character’s outward appearance. In doing so, here are a few points to consider adding to your basic description in Lesson 1:
 
•           What is their ethnic background, how does this define their appearance? All of them are white Anglo-Saxon(?)

•           What is their body build: are they fat, pasty, unkempt, voluptuous, buckteeth, have a uni-brow—no eyebrows, or do they have well-defined features?
Jake's brows are sparse, lean well muscled, he's a SEAL.

Amanda works out doing yoga and aerobics plus she works in a convenience store. She keeps her brows neat has dark brown eyes, a medium brown curly hair. Medium bone structure, she's stands about 5' 5" wears heels when she goes out, prefers jeans and shirts when she's not working where she wears khakis and a polo shirt furnished by the store. 

•           What is their bone structure, shape of lips, nose ears, and their physique (do they workout, or need to work out more)?
•           How is their hair styled, the length, is it wavy, thick frizzy, straight, always worn in a ponytail, a man bun?
•           What do they wear on their heads?  In their hair—depending on the season your story takes place or era you are writing about?
•           Are their eyes large, round, squinty, or oval? Large or small eyelashes?
•           Do they wear glasses—what shape/color?
•           Skin tones, not just for ethnic descriptions, but say you’re writing a beach novel and the poor dear fell asleep on the beach on the hottest day of the year? Ouch!
•           Do they have scars or other markings on their face, or other parts of their body—where? How did they get them?
•           Go ahead and think about other parts of the body that need descriptions—the hands, feet, etc.
 
And just to give you more to think about:
•           How are they dressed?
•           What kind of shoes, shock, stocking, foot ware, if any?
•           Color, styles of clothing (period dress)?
•           Are their clothes, hand-made, fashion plate, or off-the-rack?

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Romance Tangled up with Suspense

Re: Lesson One Homework Response-Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

Thanks Carol, I've been working on this since 2012. 

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Romance Tangled up with Suspense



-----Original Message-----
From: Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
To: STAR-Character-Workshop <STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io>
Sent: Sun, Feb 10, 2019 6:50 pm
Subject: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Lesson One Homework Response-Kathy

Hi, Kathy,
It’s good to see that not only do you have a basic description of your character, Jake Weston, but you already know he’s a Navy SEAL, and have pictured him as Viggo Mortensen. We’ll talk more about picturing your characters as a celebrity, or other well-known character, as the class continues. It’s always a great place to start.  I look forward to learning more about him in Lesson Two.
 
Carol
 
Carol Henry
Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures
Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll
Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance
 

Character Development Lesson Three

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

IT’S ALL ABOUT CHARACTER—Beyond the Basics©  Lesson Three

By Carol Henry

 

 

First a reminder:  After reading through everyone’s Lesson Two, I was amazed at what several of you came up with, however, there are a couple of things to take note of:

•           Describe, describe, describe—get those descriptions down; now is not the time to generalize your character’s visual ‘looks’—be exact, over the top, so you can refer to this later when you’re writing or re-writing that scene and you need to know what they actually ‘look’ like.

•           You need to be more specific than referring to a character look-alike—we don’t see the look-alike person in the book—need to add more descriptive features. Remember, you might know who your character looks like, but your reader might not know that person in real life to identify with--your readers needs to ‘see’ what he/she looks like.

 

 

LESSON 3: Mannerisms, Speech Patterns, and Personalities

 

Do you stereotype your characters, or do they have their own distinctive mannerisms, speech patterns, and personalities?  These character traits can be indicative of their country of origin, religious upbringing, political views, ethnicity, and time period in which the story takes place (we’ll touch on this later in the class). To make sure your characters aren’t just cardboard characters, here are a few things to consider when giving your character life—how they move around in your story:

 

SPEECH:

•           Do your characters use the same words/phrases over and over, do they use slang, or are they eloquent and ‘refined’?

•           Do they have a distinctive speech pattern?

•           Do they use certain words repeatedly?

•           Do they have an accent?

•           Do they stutter or use clichés?

•           Is their speech indicative of being well educated; are their words controlled?

•           Do they run off at the mouth? (supporting characters like Marybelle, in my novel Ribbons of Steel, was just such a supporting character, a cousin to the heroine, who added a spark of humor to the story, as well as moved the story line forward). Do you know a real-life character like this?

 

MANNERISMS:

•           How do your characters ‘move’ around in your story? How do they sit, stand, eat, laugh, argue, show patience, or even walk through a scene?

•           Do they walk fast, slow, sway, hip movements, swagger?

•           What do they do when talking? Stand on one foot, lean against something, hold their back and head forward, sideways, uptight, look at the ground, look at the person they’re talking to, or over their shoulder avoiding eye contact?

•           Same with sitting, do they cross their legs, sit up straight, lounge, are they relaxed, uptight (might depend on the scene)?

•           Do your characters get excited easily, overly excited, laugh a lot, or are they controlled, subdued, frown, are slow to respond and have slow or quick movements? Do they meet other’s eyes, or shy away?

•           Does this person have a nervous habit, hand movements, twitch, comb hand through hair, etc.?

•           What is it about your character(s) that make them stand out from the others?

 

PERSONALITY: is your character:

•           Courageous

•           Virtuous

•           Likeable

•           Competent

•           Sly

•           A liar

•           A cheat

•           A control freak

•           Trustworthy

•           Has trust issues

 

The list here is endless, depending on what is needed for your individual characters and the story—see what you can come up with.

 

Tips of the Day:

•           Each of your characters should not have the same mannerisms, words, speech, and their personalities, although they can be similar, they should differ enough to make them more individualistic, realistic, and interesting (good or bad) to the others in your story.

•           Make sure speech patterns are used during the time period your story takes place.

•           Each character should have their ‘own’ speech pattern and ‘words’ that they use repeatedly throughout the story.

•           Become a ‘people watcher’ to hone in on real-life mannerisms, speech and personalities.

 

HOMEWORK—LESSON 3: Using the above criteria, find and describe your character’s specific mannerisms, speech, and personality traits. Feel free to share with the class.

 

Note: Lesson 4 will start to focus on your character’s background—where do your characters come from?

 

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback -Kathy

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Kathy, for purposes of this class I’ll be helping you with Jake Weston’s Character—the Hero.  It’s great you’ve already got your other characters assigned a role in relation to Jake.

 

So, we need to see more of what Jake actually looks like. Other than knowing he’s white Anglo Saxon (?), and that his brows are sparse, he’s lean and well-muscled, we need to know a bit more.  How is his sun-streaked brown hair styled? He may be a NAVY Seal, but we need to know how he dresses on and off the job. 

 

I know sometimes these are hard to wrap your head around before you get started writing, but check out the individual points I listed at the bottom of Lesson Two again, and see if you can come up with a few more descriptive details for Jake that will give us a better sense of what he looks like. What he actually wears on the job might be indicative of his on duty location—is he dressed for undercover work, and if so, what does that require him to look like—what all is part of his uniform? Again, his work location might have him wearing a beard, dressed mostly in black for night time recon purposes. Of course he might be all over the place globally, but for this story, you need to pinpoint his location and what he wears.  Anyway, I’m sure you’re getting my point.

 

So, feel free to look at Lesson Two again and fill in a few more details. It’s up to you whether or not  you’d like to have me look at Lesson Two again. In any case, don’t get discouraged, sometimes it takes plotting (or even writing) a few more scenes of your story until you get a good ‘feel’ for your characters so they can be who they need to be in your story.

 

I look foreword to finding out more about Jake as the class continues,

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Re: Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback -Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

Jake has scars a particularly nasty one from a recent knife wound from his last deployment where he almost lost his life.
When he's off duty he wears button fly jeans and either t-shirt or a polo shirt. 
When he's on duty he wears "cammies" which is his camouflage uniform with tan boots that are tactical ones that are issued by the military. He tends to wear the same type of boot off duty.
Off the rack, he tends to wear dark colored shirts. 
His hair is a short military haircut. Not buzz, but close to the head.
He's originally from Texas, hopes to make it to retirement (20 years) he's about halfway there with 9.5 years in the Navy. Entered at 18 went through basic then BUD/S training. He's Lead Petty Officer (E-6) in charge of his team/platoon. 
Never married, was engaged, she sent him a "Dear John" email saying his long absences, being stationed in San Diego so far from Texas wasn't what she wanted. 
Now, he's met another woman at a critical time in his career.  

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Romance Tangled up with Suspense




Lesson 2 Homework-Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

I thought of some more things about Jake. He has laugh lines around his eyes. He wears sunglasses some of the time. He's tanned from living in San Diego and swimming in the ocean. 

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Romance Tangled up with Suspense

Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

Hi, Kathy, Wow, this tells me a lot about Jake, as well as leading up to some of his internal/external emotions, and possible conflicts, and his goals, one of which is to make it to his 20 years so he can retire in one piece J  The Dear John Letter can also play into his emotional hang-ups as far as relationships are concerned. Can I assume that his ‘cammies’ are more the desert-colored, and not the typical greens?  Again, I’m assuming location of his current deployment J

 

Thanks for sharing. I have a better picture of Jake as we piece his character together.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Re: Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

Yes generally the SEALs were desert camouflage, sometimes depending they may wear one more green, or even white for training in snow. 

kcr2696439@...
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https://ckcrouch.com/
Romance Tangled up with Suspense



-----Original Message-----
From: Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
To: STAR-Character-Workshop <STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io>
Sent: Tue, Feb 12, 2019 10:23 am
Subject: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Hi, Kathy, Wow, this tells me a lot about Jake, as well as leading up to some of his internal/external emotions, and possible conflicts, and his goals, one of which is to make it to his 20 years so he can retire in one piece J  The Dear John Letter can also play into his emotional hang-ups as far as relationships are concerned. Can I assume that his ‘cammies’ are more the desert-colored, and not the typical greens?  Again, I’m assuming location of his current deployment J
 
Thanks for sharing. I have a better picture of Jake as we piece his character together.
 
Carol
 
Carol Henry
Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures
Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll
Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance
 

Re: Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

 

We’re kind of a military family, and my youngest son was in the Air Force and now the Air National Guard and has been deployed to those desert areas on occasion J So I was almost certain you were referring to the desert camouflage.

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

carolhenry@...; http://www.carolhenry.org

 

From: STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io [mailto:STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io] On Behalf Of Kathy via Groups.Io
Sent: Tuesday, February 12, 2019 7:29 PM
To: STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io
Subject: Re: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

 

Yes generally the SEALs were desert camouflage, sometimes depending they may wear one more green, or even white for training in snow. 

kcr2696439@...
Kathy Crouch writing as CK Crouch
https://ckcrouch.com/
Romance Tangled up with Suspense

 

 

-----Original Message-----
From: Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
To: STAR-Character-Workshop <STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io>
Sent: Tue, Feb 12, 2019 10:23 am
Subject: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Hi, Kathy, Wow, this tells me a lot about Jake, as well as leading up to some of his internal/external emotions, and possible conflicts, and his goals, one of which is to make it to his 20 years so he can retire in one piece J  The Dear John Letter can also play into his emotional hang-ups as far as relationships are concerned. Can I assume that his ‘cammies’ are more the desert-colored, and not the typical greens?  Again, I’m assuming location of his current deployment J

 

Thanks for sharing. I have a better picture of Jake as we piece his character together.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

 

Re: Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

Kathy <kcr2696439@...>
 

The story takes place in Yuma, AZ at the training center out there. Under the guise of training they're tracking a killer of SEALs.

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Romance Tangled up with Suspense



-----Original Message-----
From: Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
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Sent: Tue, Feb 12, 2019 6:41 pm
Subject: Re: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy

 
We’re kind of a military family, and my youngest son was in the Air Force and now the Air National Guard and has been deployed to those desert areas on occasion J So I was almost certain you were referring to the desert camouflage.
 
Carol Henry
Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures
Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll
Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance
 
From: STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io [mailto:STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io] On Behalf Of Kathy via Groups.Io
Sent: Tuesday, February 12, 2019 7:29 PM
To: STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io
Subject: Re: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy
 
Yes generally the SEALs were desert camouflage, sometimes depending they may wear one more green, or even white for training in snow. 
kcr2696439@...
Kathy Crouch writing as CK Crouch
https://ckcrouch.com/
Romance Tangled up with Suspense
 
 
-----Original Message-----
From: Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
To: STAR-Character-Workshop <STAR-Character-Workshop@groups.io>
Sent: Tue, Feb 12, 2019 10:23 am
Subject: [STAR-Character-Workshop] Character Lesson 2 Homework feedback 2 Kathy
Hi, Kathy, Wow, this tells me a lot about Jake, as well as leading up to some of his internal/external emotions, and possible conflicts, and his goals, one of which is to make it to his 20 years so he can retire in one piece J  The Dear John Letter can also play into his emotional hang-ups as far as relationships are concerned. Can I assume that his ‘cammies’ are more the desert-colored, and not the typical greens?  Again, I’m assuming location of his current deployment J
 
Thanks for sharing. I have a better picture of Jake as we piece his character together.
 
Carol
 
Carol Henry
Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures
Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll
Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance
 

Character Lesson 4 Homework

Carol Henry <carolhenry@...>
 

I have a busy scheduled tomorrow, so am sending you Lesson 4 early.  If you have any questions on either Lesson 3 or 4, let me know.

 

Carol

 

Carol Henry

Destination: Romance—Exotic Romantic Suspense Adventures

Cairo Connection: #2 Best Romance Novel 2018 Preditors and Editor’s Reader’s Poll

Nothing Short of a Miracle: #1 Best Seller Amazon Encore Holiday Romance

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Lesson 3- Speech, Mannerisms, and Personality - Jamie

jbrydonejack@...
 

Abigail Madison

Speech: Abigail’s speech is refined and controlled most of the time (befitting a daughter of a university professor), but not always; when she is flustered, the first thing in her head tends to pop out. She does have a catchphrase; when something amuses or surprises her, her go-to phrase is, “Merciful heavens.” This was consciously cultivated, knowing that she could spontaneously say worse things (as mentioned in the previous sentence). She has a 1770s Boston accent, tinged slightly with traces of the Derbyshire roots of her parents.

Mannerisms: Even when sitting, Abigail tends to look like she’s about ready to come out of her seat; she has a restless energy which makes her prefer to do things rather than sit or be waited upon. When in England, she tends to move and sit awkwardly after she gets her new, more up-to-date clothes; she just is not comfortable in them, and her manner shows that. She can sit still if she is actively engaged in an activity, like copying over music sheets for her young friends or reading a book. Being a foreigner in a formal society, she almost goes overboard in trying to appear proper when eating or following rules of society, but some persnickety other characters still can be harsh in their judgment. After a bit--since the detractors will be unkind anyway--she loosens up and allows more of her natural personality to come through, in part evidenced by a more relaxed posture. She tends to look people directly in the eye and hold a gaze longer than most women of the times or of her class; this can make other people uncomfortable (but Abigail doesn’t understand why). If keeping eye contact were a game of “chicken,” Abigail would win every time. She appears earnest to others but not unkind.

Personality: She doesn’t see herself as courageous or anything special whatsoever. But in her past, she had to be strong, independent, and courageous; she’s just a little bit rusty using these facets of her personality. Since her husband's death, she has simply defined herself as the dutiful daughter taking care of her aging father, who is still a professor.

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Lesson 4 - Name, Background, Important Event - JamieBJ

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Name: Her full name is Abigail Faith Lucas Madison; her parents were Nathaniel and Grace Lucas; Grace named her after her very good friend. In her late teens, she married Dr. Madison. I specifically chose her name because it sounded very much to my ear like a name for a Revolutionary War era woman. I’ve lived with this name rattling around in my head for a long time, and her name IS her to me.

Early Childhood/Background: She was born in Boston, but the family moved out of the city limits as the war heated up. Her father wanted to keep them safe and be sure that he had unimpeded access to his work. Her father is a professor at Harvard, the chair for mathematics and natural philosophy. H is very learned, very patient, and kind-hearted; he doesn’t side directly with either patriots or loyalists in the war. He has 5 daughters to protect, so he doesn’t want to do anything to upset either side; plus as an academic, he can see both sides. Abigail is #4 daughter of 5. Her closest friends are her sisters, though other girls who live nearby are also friends of the family. All of the girls do well making their own amusements; for instance, since it is hard to get new sheet music from the continent, they have great fun improvising on the same set of sheet music over and over. Abigail is bright and inquisitive; her mother is her first teacher, and her father takes over her informal education when Grace is killed. Nathaniel encourages Abigail to study what interests her and is secretly pleased to see his daughter take an interest in the very unladylike topics that he teaches. Abigail is especially close to her father because of this. Abigail’s personality did change after her mother’s death; she became more withdrawn and quiet.

Character-Forming Incident: She only has a few memories of her mother, as her mother was killed when Abigail was 7 or 8. In fact, it was a defining moment of her young life. Soldiers had been moving in the roads near their home. Mother and Father determined this to be dangerous and so set about gathering the children inside. Abigail was playing in the barn with her sister but becomes petrified when she hears the sounds of the fife and drum. (I took this from some family notes about a distant GGF doing something similar when he was 10 years old.) Her younger sister runs out of the barn when their parents call them to the house, but Abigail can’t bring herself to move at first because she is so scared. She sees her mother hit by a bullet as she tries bring the recalcitrant youngest sister to the house. Abigail carries guilt for this because she was the one who had convinced her sister to play outside with her that day. Because of this and other incidents that happened in the war, Abigail has what we would call PTSD today, which can strike her suddenly in the current storyline. (Let’s say she doesn’t do well when seeing masses of redcoats.) Further, on an unconscious level, this has made Abigail fear forming lasting relationships; those she has loved have been taken from her without rhyme or reason. (Mother from a stray bullet, husband from a fatal, sudden disease.) While friendly to those outside her family, she doesn’t people actually get close to her emotionally.

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Jamie BJ
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